DragonBall remake fic I'm working on.

[conanthessj]

I'm pretty sure I posted a primitive version of the first chapter of this months ago on DaizEX, but since this is the appropriate spot for comments and posting the true version of it, I thought I may as well get to work. Basically, this is a fic I'm working on for original DragonBall, it's designed to be its own canon but to also keep somewhat continuity nods to the latter DBZ and GT series, such as Goku not meeting Raditz, as well as not finding out he's a Saiyan.

However, this will be a basic remake from the ground up, changing several aspects such as Goku's age, foreshadowing of the latter series', and much more insight into Goku's Saiyan heritage and struggle with that aspect of his blood and soul...preferably his alter ego you will meet in Chapter 1, "Kakarrot". It may all seem confusing right now, but trust me, it'll make more sense as it goes along. I should say upfront, I'm adapting the Earth of this adaptation into modern times.

This means talking animal companions won't be happening, certain character aspects will be changed, but overall it should be all good. By the way, you may notice a sprinkling prophecy through out this plot, I'm banking on that being one of the main attractions of this adaptation. Alrighty then, let's get underway with the basic startup summary:

Prophecy # 1 -- "On a tranquil small planet that is of green and blue of essence, where its evolution has been in motion for many millennia, there exists 4 children. These children will be key elements in the growing of the true one, the one meant to give the Earth, Universe, and After Life itself salvation in the gleaming future. When his name is known all over the world, when he becomes a great hero of his time, he still won't have even a minuscule glimpse of his true fate. Live as one of humanity he will, walk among them, talk among them. Hence from the day his people die, he will live and serve a cause they could never comprehend. It has begun..."

"DragonBall"

Comments as I continue work would be appreciated.

[Chaos Saiyajin]

;D Sounds awesome Conan. Can't wait to hear about more, but who are these four children? Goku, Yamcha, Bulma, and Krillin?

[conanthessj]

tullece said:

;D Sounds awesome Conan. Can't wait to hear about more, but who are these four children? Goku, Yamcha, Bulma, and Krillin?

Good guess, got 3 out of 4 right ;D. Anyhow, look forward to some live-action caps to possibly go along with my fic, which I don't think has ever been done before in a fic. Samples can be seen in my avatar and sig. Let me know what you think of that idea whilst I finish up chapter 1.

[Chaos Saiyajin]

Sounds pretty fuckin' awesome, Conan. So I guess since Radditz isn't going to appear, neither are Vegeta or Nappa?

[conanthessj]

tullece said:

Sounds pretty fuckin' awesome, Conan. So I guess since Radditz isn't going to appear, neither are Vegeta or Nappa?

Vegeta and Nappa definitely won't be appearing, I will make references to Raditz when the time is right, and I'm even thinking of starting up the plot of him traveling to Earth just as the story ends. Right now, I'm basically trying to focus on how to adapt the concepts of the Saga of Goku/Red Ribbon/King Piccolo arcs. If you've ever read the outline to the supposed live-action movie, then you may notice I'll be borrowing ideas from that. Also, I hope you haven't seen the Superman prequel show, Smallville, otherwise you'll know I'm borrowing even more ideas from that show than the live-action movie outline. Basically, this is just to show how I think original DB could be adapted into a modern, live-action TV show, but also written out as a basic fanfic that happens to have prophecy aspects and live-action caps spinkled about.

[Chaos Saiyajin]

Can't say I've seen Smallville, but I watched the other live action Superman show when I was younger...what the fuck was that called again? Anyway, I also read the supposed Live Action plot and found it quite odd...

I'd just love to see Goku go Oozaru on Piccolo Daimao.

[conanthessj]

tullece said:

Can't say I've seen Smallville, but I watched the other live action Superman show when I was younger...what the fuck was that called again? Anyway, I also read the supposed Live Action plot and found it quite odd...

I'd just love to see Goku go Oozaru on Piccolo Daimao.

Hehehe... Well, needless to say, the Oozaru form will play a larger role in my adaptation than its 2 humble cameos did in the actual DB.

[Chaos Saiyajin]

Conan, you bastard. Teasing us like that...

BTW, everyone I command you all to check out my new sig!

[conanthessj]

Chapter1, I hope ya's like it, let me know if it gets you excited enough to kill me for the folowing chapters. ;D



"DragonBall"

"Chapter 1 -- Beginnings"


Prophecy #1 -- "On a tranquil small planet that is of green and blue of essence, where its evolution has been in motion for many millennia, there exists 4 children. These children will be key elements in the growing of the true one, the one meant to give the Earth, Universe, and After Life itself salvation in the gleaming future. When his name is known all over the world, when he becomes a great hero of his time, he still won't have even a minuscule glimpse of his true fate. Live as one of humanity he will, walk among them, talk among them. Hence from the day his people die, he will live and serve a cause they could never comprehend. It has begun..."


Somewhere, deep in space, on the other side of our galaxy, there exists a race of people that are on the verge of their final fate. Among these people, exists a cursed one, cursed for the horrible deeds his people have done to thousands of other civilizations. As technologicly advanced as his people may be, all but this cursed one are blind to the truth. This truth going by the name of betrayal, has revealed himself to the cursed one, leaving him only one option to go with.

On the surface of this race's blood red planet, on the outside of its shelters under the large red sky, this cursed warrior that lives with a tail attached to his body has set down three nude infants in odd structures. These infants, one of them being his own recently born child, all lay nude in round, metallic space pods that are ready for a lift off. The warrior looks upon his son with remorse, remorse that rightfully belongs on his face, however he also tries his best to bear a smile for the child.

"My son, I am only able to save you and a few others," says the warrior. "I wish I could go with you, but my fate is already set. I wish I could change my destiny, yours too, but it is far too late. Keep within you the pride of our proud race, live with honor after I die with pride. Good-bye, my son. "

With nothing more to say, the warrior gently grazes his hand upon the baby's slightly, spiky haired head, and closes the hatch of the space pod as he has to two others. As his son's crying is drowned out by the sound proof door closing, all three space pods begin launching off the surface. As they proceed to leave the atmosphere of the planet, the smiling warrior suddenly turns around to look in another direction of the looming red sky. A tear slowly begins to fall down his cheek as his soothing smile becomes a fierce sign of rage. He grips his fists in a sign of malice, and lowers his body in an odd stance.

"I may die," says the warrior, "but my flesh and blood will live on. It's time..." The man utters under his breath, and with that, he leaps into the air in a fantastic display of flight, all-out flying at great speed into the sky itself.

"I'm coming for you!!"

The man screams his seemingly final words, for the moment he vanishes out of sight in the sky, a white light envelops the entire surface. As this happens, the space pod carrying the man's son lunges into outer space, the destruction of his people and planet happening literally right behind him.

As the small pod travels millions of miles through space, the boy mysteriously receives unknown words from the voice that bid him farewell from the red planet, the voice only saying "Avenge us, please, avenge us..."

As the pod makes its final approach to a certain blue and green planet, third from the star, Sole, it enters our atmosphere with a great ferocity. Flying at an amazing speed along the blue sky, it crash lands in a mountain base, where of which an old man is innocently walking along. Hearing the crash, he comes running along to see what has caused this incident. Humbly walking along the crash site, he notices that this is more than just a common crash of this planet.

"Dear Lord in Heaven, what is it?" The old man asks himself as he approaches the crash site. Hidden within a patch of green grass and moss, he notices a naked infant child crying his heart out for help. "What in the world? Where did you come from little guy?" The man says as he picks the boy up in his arms. "Well, since your parents are clearly not from around here, I think I'll keep an eye on you, it's better than being a lone ol' hermit. I hope you don't mind. Now, to think of a name. Hmm." The man says, pondering what to call the infant, when suddenly the boy tugs the old man's mustache.

"Ouch, nutty little guy, you've got quite the arm there. But don't worry, I'm a bit of an odd fellow myself, believe it or not." Says the old man, as the boy tugs once more. "Ouch, c'mon lil' fella', I'm old enough to be your Grandpa, you wanna be the death of me? Now about that name ... Ah, yes! I think I know what to call ya'. How does Goku sound?" The old man asks, much to the baby's excitement as he laughs in glee. "All right then, Goku it is," laughing the old and gentle man, "Goku! What a good little boy."

[Sato]

Nice so far, I noticed one or two spelling errors, but they were rather minor... ("Began" instead of "Begun" and "his" instead of "is").

Overall I'd like to see where this is going.

[conanthessj]

saiyamanms said:

Nice so far, I noticed one or two spelling errors, but they were rather minor... ("Began" instead of "Begun" and "his" instead of "is").

Overall I'd like to see where this is going.

Spelling mistakes fixed.

[lordmandalore]

Nice start Conan. Kep it up.

[conanthessj]

saiyamanms said:

Nice so far, I noticed one or two spelling errors, but they were rather minor... ("Began" instead of "Begun" and "his" instead of "is").

Overall I'd like to see where this is going.

lordmandalore said:

Nice start Conan. Kep it up.

Thanks to both of you for the positive comments. Interesting tibit about the pics I'm using, I run each of them through my own alterations, each pic has some alteration from its original version. In fact, this pic:

That, I actually pasted a Saiyan space pod, digitally altered it to match the venue of the outer space landscape, and implemented it into a CG shot of a star going nova, hoping to give a new entertaining perspective of Vegeta's destruction. I hope you guys like it, maybe I shouldn't give away all my dirty little secrets, though I thought you'd like how I pulled that off. Keep the comments coming, and Chaos Saiyajin, have you read Chapter 1 yet?

[Chaos Saiyajin]

Awesome, Conan. I love the screenshots, it really makes me feel like I'm there.